This is my homework based on the key words "Times Square and June". I got sidetracked by the geography of New York (which I still haven't got right) so the story is nothing like I planned. It is product of reading WWZ too many times and not having an original thought in my head.
I stepped out of the helicopter and
it hit me, that familiar smell of death and decay. I’ve stopped wondering how long it will stay
in the air. I no longer feel the need to
wretch. My stomach gave a little
flutter, not at the smell, but at the realisation that after almost a year of
living in hell my body has accepted it as normal. I feel more fear by this notion than I felt during my entire
time at Brooklyn.
I was in charge of the Brooklyn
Bridge for six months. I was there when the evacuation began and I
was there to oversee the first recon team ventured into Manhattan. I was also the one to give the order to close
the Bridge.
We had kept the Bridge open for
the first few weeks and the public shuffled their way through, slowly but
surely. The medical teams were filtering
out the Infected with the dogs picking out the rest. I am proud that not one of the Infected got
through on my watch.
Thousands were saved at
Brooklyn but we should have saved more. Someone made the decision to blow up the
rest of the bridges and fill in the Lincoln Tunnel in an attempt to streamline the
flow of refugees. It was never announced
who made this decision. There was no
glory with it so it’s hardly surprising that it was brushed under the carpet.
My team did their job and they
did it well. It was those idiots on the Washington
Bridge that let a few of the
Infected across. In fairness the
Infected were quickly put down but they got lucky and a major catastrophe was diverted. It was only then that the policy of Zero
Tolerance was introduced. This was the
day when someone sitting in an office surrounded by armed guards said a big fuck you to Manhattan.
No more people got off the Island,
at least, no one got off it from my Bridge.
Chaos followed as the civilians tried
to force their way through the blockade but we held our ground. I will admit that I gave the order on several
occasions for shots to be fired. The
crowds needed to be dispersed and quickly.
A mass gathering of people increased the odds of the infection
spreading.
The clever few sensed this and
moved on. I hope they found another way
out. I know there were boats charging a
small fortune to take people across the river. I hinted as much to those who would listen.
The cost would have quadrupled when the Navy were given orders to sink
any boats assisting escapees.
Thanks to the media my face is
now forever associated with closing the Brooklyn
Bridge. I am hated for it but at least I never used
the circumstances to make a profit – I was merely following orders. I did what I had to do, at least this is what
I tell myself when I wake up in the night. This always happens on the rare occasions when I manage to sleep.
I can still see the faces of each
and every soul who cursed death upon me for not letting them across the
Bridge. Mothers wailed and fathers held their
children up in the air to give me a better view of those I helped to sentenced
to death…. merely following orders. If I
keep repeating it I am bound to start believing it.
There was one man who tried to
cross the Bridge just as the evacuation order had been issued. This was before the crowds arrived. He had his dog with him – an old, grey mongrel
with three legs. Animals weren’t allowed
across the Bridge and he refused to leave his dog.
He was the only person who turned back with their pet. I know he smiled at the dog before he turned away. The dog’s name was Toby. I saw his name on his dirty gold collar. I can’t remember what the man looked like.
Three weeks was all it took for
the angry and betrayed faces of the condemned to slowly transform into a hoard
of the Infected. The barrier was strong
and was never going to be breached. I
allowed my team to take their time picking off the Infected. I knew that they were worried about friendly
fire and I thought this approach would ease their stress.
It only took about a week before the smell
became unbearable. I led by example and lit the
first fire. It got rid of the bodies and killing any Infected who were on fire
removed the human element even further.
No one ever said anything but I knew they thanked me for it.
Fifty of us held the Bridge for
the five months it was shut. I didn’t
lose a man. This went unnoticed by the
world as once again everyone’s attention was on the Washington
Bridge where one fuck up followed
after another. In the end they just blew
up the Bridge and transferred everyone to Yonkers.
I can’t imagine that many people
in South Manhattan made it as far as the Park but they
didn’t stand a chance if they made it to the bloodbath that was Yonkers. We got off lightly compared to that shit
storm yet it was hailed as a success.
Nevertheless here I stand in the
middle of Times Square on 1st June one
hundred and eighty days after I started my post at Brooklyn. The Square was once one of the world’s most
recognisable sights but now it is a dilapidated and broken down cemetery where
those who managed to ride out the past six months in hiding were herded.
Luckily for the survivors it
seems that the relief teams have been quickly put in place and they appear to
be getting looked after well. It is some
small consolation I suppose. I am sure
they will make a small fortune appearing on chat shows once they have been
given the all clear. I don’t mean this it’s just the lack of sleep talking.
The population of Manhattan
once boasted over four million now only a few thousand remain. It took weeks to gather up the survivors. Unfortunately for all the advances in
technology infrared couldn’t differentiate between humans and the Infected. Clearing the streets was a slow task but I
don’t blame the survivors from hiding from us.
I wouldn’t have trusted me either.
With the south being completely
clear Times Square became the official centre point for
the relief stations. A line across 57th
Street signified the end of the green zone. The line was drawn very hastily so I’m glad
it isn’t my signature authorising this decision.
I have been told that as a reward
for my heroics at Brooklyn I am to be charged with
overseeing the clear out in Central Park. I think this is code for me being the most
expendable.
My team followed me out of the
helicopter and started to stock up on supplies for our journey through the
overgrown wilderness of the Park. I
reached out to take the checklist from Jones, my second in command, and became
very aware of the burning sensation in my left arm.
I've had no contact with any of the
Infected so I see no cause for alarm. I cut it on some glass when reaching down
for my backpack before getting onto the helicopter. I managed to avoid injury for six months yet it’s a small shard of glass that gets me hour before I left the Bridge. If I thought for one second that I was about
to become one of the Infected I would pull the trigger without hesitation. I would never risk my putting anyone in
danger.
Jones is now looking at my arm so
I stretch dramatically and motion that we are ready to head out. I lead the charge as we walk through Times
Square nodding in acknowledgement at the survivors. I allow my team their moment of fame as
we trudge up 7th Avenue. It’s the very least they deserve.
I give myself a shake. I don’t mean to feel so bitter but I just
need to sleep. I am proud of what we
have achieved. The sight in Times
Square shows that humanity can endure even the most
unthinkable horrors. These people are the real heroes.
The burning pain is getting
worse. I will put a proper dressing on
it once we get the entrance to the Park. I turn back to take one final look at Times Square.
My arm? It’s nothing to worry about at all. I will keep repeating this until I believe it.
Very good. I wanted to keep right on reading.
ReplyDeleteThank you for reading.
DeleteI don't think the tenses read quite right and I want to change the ending but at least draft one is finished!
I hope you got your homework finished too.
K :-)
Solid first draft, a little choppy in parts but still get the gist of what you were going for, ending works well maybe dwell a bit more on the just following orders idea with even more extreme examples of horrible things the narrator had to oversee.
ReplyDeleteCheers!
DeleteCan you point out a couple of the choppy parts for me just so I have a reference?
My character's attitude was very bitter but I toned it down - I will revisit that part.
will also have a think about adding a few more examples
Thanks as always!!
K :-)
Some of the earlier sections can be tightened up, like this passage;
DeleteI was in charge of the Brooklyn Bridge for six months. I was there when the evacuation began and I was there to oversee the first recon team ventured into Manhattan. I was also the one to give the order to close the Bridge.
Think it can be cleaned up and streamlined a tad but nothing that can't be corrected in the next drafts. I do the same type of thing in my first draft, over write certain passages.
Thanks!
DeleteIt will give me a starting point when I redraft
K :-)
No problem K!
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